Nice work, except...She looks at him wide-eyed. Underneath the table, she cocks the Glock she keep strapped underneath her crepe skirt.
"And you always carry a Glock," he says. "That's not in your dossier, by the way. I recognize it by the sound of the hammer. Thigh or ankle?"
Glocks are hammerless. As a Glock owner this leapt off the screen and strangled my suspension of disbelief.
The origami part rules--so cheesy!
Oh, man, did that story suck. Typical fan-fiction garbage.
Can't wait 'til Tom from Assemblage 23 makes another guest appearance! :)