now with extra "edgy"

Proof That Any Hackneyed Franchise Can Be Made Interesting; A Short Story

4 Responses:

  1. zonereyrie says:

    Nice work, except...
    She looks at him wide-eyed. Underneath the table, she cocks the Glock she keep strapped underneath her crepe skirt.

    "And you always carry a Glock," he says. "That's not in your dossier, by the way. I recognize it by the sound of the hammer. Thigh or ankle?"

    Glocks are hammerless. As a Glock owner this leapt off the screen and strangled my suspension of disbelief.

  2. primroseport says:

    The origami part rules--so cheesy!

  3. Oh, man, did that story suck. Typical fan-fiction garbage.

  4. hafnir says:

    Can't wait 'til Tom from Assemblage 23 makes another guest appearance! :)